So, since our last meeting our idea has improved considerably.
I think that our new idea has a much clearer sense of genre, and has a much more believable storyline.
I'm also happy with our new ending to the sequence: the rookie hacker pulls out his earphones to hear insistent, heavy banging on his door. The audience wonders who it is; could it be the same people that just took out his boss? This sense of enigma makes sure that the sequence finishes on a suspenseful tone, hopefully working to make the audience want to continue watching.